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April 12, 2018
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Noticed that a lot of the fan submited characters are spread out among several threads. So I opened this one to help organize them into one place. This is also a character I had in mind for Gemco academy. 

 

 

Name: Percival

 

Gender: Male

 

Current job: Gemco academy student/operative

 

Special skills: Civilian intelligence gathering, Disguises, acting

 

Flaws: Perfectionist, overconfident, doesn’t think things through,

 

Prefered Khalei: Yellow/Red

 

Sexual interest: Bisexual (Only if he’s on top)

 

Backstory: Was a student at Nanako high for a time and participated as the star of Nanako’s drama club when it was around. He dreamed of being a famous actor and dropped out of school to chase his dream. He failed however and wasn’t able to get anywhere with an acting career, so he came back home to seek a job. There he thought that his acting talents could be used in Gemco’s undercover division but he failed the entrance exam to get in. Determined to prove himself, he made a near perfect disguise of his old teacher Natan and successfully infiltrated the building as him until Natan himself caught him. He was arrested on the spot and questioned for some time until they realized he didn’t mean them any harm and could possibly be of use to them. He’s been attending their academy since then.

 

Character affiliations:

Roise: Were both apart of the drama club when it existed, may have been lovers at that point.

Male academy members: He views most men of the academy as friendly rivals and would seek to outdo them when possible.

Jeo: Percival considers Jeo so proficient and skilled that he must be inhuman or inhumanly gifted. So he doesn’t really consider Jeo a suitable rival since Percival sees no method of realistically beating him. Jeo likely barely knows about Percival’s existence.

Female academy members: Percival would have chivalrous tendencies toward his female classmates and seek to assist them when possible. (Partially because he wants to fuck them but he is polite even if they show him no sexual interest)

Holly: During his intel gathering missions, Percival may have discovered the cafe’s illegal activities but wouldn’t have reported them since he actually likes their services themselves.

April 14, 2018
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Cool character idea. 

I could use this thread for my next idea sometime in the future.

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Thanks man 😀 

April 16, 2018
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So I tried not to overthink it and write this all in one go, so excuse any errors. I kept the core but rewrote most of the character. Also, to Silver sorry for not saying anything after you responded. I spoke to Vortex, Wilson, Jcc, and a few others on discord before writing it up, so I had a core ready just needed to shape it. Also you didn't come of as rude, don't worry. Vortex told me to post there, but since there is a dedicated forum post now I'll post here.

 

Character Appearance:

  • Paul is a dark skin male with black braided hair and yellow eyes. He stands at a height of 6’3 and has an athletic body. His demeanor is calm. (Excuse my bad paint skills.)

Personality:

  • Paul is usually laid back. He believes a stress free life is a good life, but ironically has a bad temper. He is good with puzzles and problem solving, but doesn’t put much effort into things he doesn’t care for, but if it’s something he is interested in or the reward is in his favor his capabilities shine. He is kind in nature, and will repay any favors asap as he doesn’t like owing people. The easiest way to get him to do anything is by sexual favors, whether it’s sex, stripping, nudes. Paul is competitive in heart and loves to gamble. He is always ready to bet or play cards.

Background:

  • Paul’s mother died giving birth to him, leaving his father to raise him. Since he was unemployed, Paul’s father decided to take a loan with interest from a GemCo executive who approached him. He then took the money and used it at the casino in an attempt to provide for his son. One evening the same man who gave him the loan gave him another offer; “play against me and win, and I’ll clear your debt. Lose, and everything you own is mine.” Paul’s father seeing as this would be a way to be free from having to pay him off decided to take him on this offer, and lost. He realized that the man had been cheating and had no intent on being fair. Angered Paul’s father stormed out the casino saying he wouldn’t pay a dime. The next time Paul say his father was at the door steps beat up. Paul decided he would get revenge for his father and enrolled at GemCo’s academy to find the man who did this to him.

Relationships:

  • Friendly:
    • Phia: Always willing to have sex with her when she ask, but also calls on her to try new things sexually.
    • Stacy: Originally got on the treadmill next to her for some motivation while he got cardio in, Paul noticed that she could keep up with his pace and decided to ask her if she would be willing to do partner calisthenics with him.
    • Maiko: Met her at the academy.
    • Jeni: Introduced to her Maiko. She trains him at the cafe and sometimes uses sex to motivate him.
    • Roy: Hangs out with him around the academy.
  • Unfriendly:
    • David: Due to being an agent and being near the cafe, David attempted to fight Paul before Jeni stepped in to stop it. Still mad at the incident, the two will fight whenever they are together.
    • Max: When Paul first entered the gym and attempted to use the treadmill near Stacy, Max stopped him saying there are other treadmills available. Paul confronted him and after some back and forth. He decided to wait till Max left for one of his “lessons” to hop on the treadmill.
    • Ace: Paul doesn’t know that he is the one who caused his father’s dead but Ace recognizes Paul.

Character Interaction Example:

  • Paul x Phia x Riley
    • Paul: Why are we out here again?
    • Riley: It’s part of our training, we should just get this done quickly.
    • Paul: It’s not like this will help our khalei in anyway.
    • Phia: Hey Sweetie, I can motivate you, there is nice spot behind that bush there.
    • Paul: Can’t say no to that.
    • Riley: What are you guys thinking, we are in the middle of training and this is in public.
    • Paul: Why are you stressing, the longer you hold us up the longer it will take.
    • Phia: You could always join in on the fun.
    • Riley: Just hurry up.
  • Paul x Holly
    • Paul: Hey Holly, how’s business today.
    • Holly: Well as always.
    • Paul: The food here is just too good to pass up.
    • Holly: Glad you like it.
    • Paul: I’m telling you, if you had body plates business would skyrocket.
    • Holly: You of all people know why we can’t do that.
    • Paul: *laughs*

Trivia:

  • Khalei Type: Enhancement (Red)
  • Works at the casino to pay his visits at the cafe.
  • Favorite food are sushi and whipped cream.

Notes:

  • When writing his backstory I wanted to make sure to hit key points. I’m not the best writer, so I’m not sure if it sound convoluted.
    • 1. His reasoning for liking to gamble and knowing how to play card games.
    • 2. Having a reason to want to get stronger.
    • 3. A reason to go to GemCo.
  • I left Maiko and Roy vague because I’m not sure what type of relationship he would have with Maiko, and there isn’t much to go by for Roy so I don’t want to say something that doesn’t fit his character.
  • For appearance the one you gave is perfect the only things I would change are the eye and hair color. Also if the eye brows could be a bit more bushy. For the hair, when your hair is braided it doesn’t make the rows completely bald and you would still have a tape: https://i2.wp.com/thehairstylish.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/09/7-29.jpg?resize=595%2C404
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Ok thanks.

I like the idea. 

You guys got me inspired. XD

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@oecus 

 

Took a look at the description. Looks good so far, only thing Id suggest editing is the part about Jeni incentivizing training with sex. That sounds a bit ooc since she doesn’t like perves that only do stuff for sex. Its Vortex’s call but I Think she’d be more interested in a guy that wouldnt need that kind of incentive to train to fight. 

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Also, I have some updated dialogue concepts for the character I posted up earlier. 

Wilsonthegreen said
Noticed that a lot of the fan submited characters are spread out among several threads. So I opened this one to help organize them into one place. This is also a character I had in mind for Gemco academy. 

 

 

Name: Percival

 

Gender: Male

 

Current job: Gemco academy student/operative

 

Special skills: Civilian intelligence gathering, Disguises, acting

 

Flaws: Perfectionist, overconfident, doesn’t think things through,

 

Prefered Khalei: Yellow/Red

 

Sexual interest: Bisexual (Only if he’s on top)

 

Backstory: Was a student at Nanako high for a time and participated as the star of Nanako’s drama club when it was around. He dreamed of being a famous actor and dropped out of school to chase his dream. He failed however and wasn’t able to get anywhere with an acting career, so he came back home to seek a job. There he thought that his acting talents could be used in Gemco’s undercover division but he failed the entrance exam to get in. Determined to prove himself, he made a near perfect disguise of his old teacher Natan and successfully infiltrated the building as him until Natan himself caught him. He was arrested on the spot and questioned for some time until they realized he didn’t mean them any harm and could possibly be of use to them. He’s been attending their academy since then.

 

Character affiliations:

Roise: Were both apart of the drama club when it existed, may have been lovers at that point.

Male academy members: He views most men of the academy as friendly rivals and would seek to outdo them when possible.

Jeo: Percival considers Jeo so proficient and skilled that he must be inhuman or inhumanly gifted. So he doesn’t really consider Jeo a suitable rival since Percival sees no method of realistically beating him. Jeo likely barely knows about Percival’s existence.

Female academy members: Percival would have chivalrous tendencies toward his female classmates and seek to assist them when possible. (Partially because he wants to fuck them but he is polite even if they show him no sexual interest)

Holly: During his intel gathering missions, Percival may have discovered the cafe’s illegal activities but wouldn’t have reported them since he actually likes their services themselves.  

Percival, Phia, Ari

Phia: You’re pretty good with that gun there wonder boy. You good at handling a girl too?
Percival: Pretty good? Id hazard that Im the best of the students here.
Ari: Really? Is that why Jeo is the top of class and not you?
Percival: Well that’s not a fair comparison. He’s like a robot with how calculating he is. A passionate soul like me couldn’t hope to compete.
Percival: If it weren’t for what the girls here say about him, I wouldn’t think he was a man at all.
Phia: Oh he’s a man all right and he knows just what a woman wants in one. Don’t you think so Ari?
Ari: W-what would I know about that?!

Percival, Candy, Linda, Jeo

Candy: Ugh, this khalei stuff is hard to work with.
Linda: Yeah but that Percival guy makes it look easy.
Percival: Why thank you girls, if you’d like I can-
Linda: Whoa! Is that Jeo over there?!
Candy: He’s really good, we should get some pointers from him.
Linda: Hey Jeo! Can we ask you something?
Jeo: Tch, I don’t have time for this.
Percival: *Sigh* He discards their affection so quickly...

Percival, Phia

Phia: Yo wonder boy, why’re you running so hot? You in trouble or something?
Percival: Running hot? I don’t think I understand.
Phia: You’re overdoing it with the khalei. I can sense you from a mile away.
Percival: R-really?!
Phia: Yeah, for a civilian mission it’s no big deal, since regular people can’t feel it. But if someone like me is gunning for you, you’d better learn how to keep it down.
Percival: I see, thank you Phia.
Phia: It’s no big deal but if you really want to thank me, I can find you when we both aren’t on the job.
Percival: I’d be delighted to “thank” you personally.

Percival, Roise

Roise: Oh? Is that you Percival?
Percival: What?! How could you recognize me when Im disguised as an everyday man?
Roise: But you were an ordinary man back at Nanako. Well, mostly ordinary. So it wasn’t exactly hard to spot you.
Percival: Ah I see. That makes sense. So how are things back at the drama club?
Roise: It’s shut down for now. When you left and the seniors graduated there wasn’t enough people to keep it going.
Percival: Such a shame... Id offer to help now but I don’t know if Id have the time with my new job.
Roise: It’s all right. We didn’t perform much anyway, so I don’t think many will miss it.
Percival: I disagree, I remember the two of us having some loving moments on stage after rehearsal...
Roise: Yeah but it stayed at rehearsal, you never “performed” with me in public like you promised.
Percival: You know Im not the kind of man to break a promise.
Roise: If that’s the case, why don’t you keep your word right now?

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I'm going to post my idea here to back it up. I've had some laptop problems and don't want to risk losing it.

You can read it or ignore it. I'm just gonna leave it here and come back to it later on. Maybe make changes then too.

 

Real name is Chenermal Trucarpa. "Cheh-near-mul" "True-car-peh". But she is known as Chenny.
She comes from one of the richest families in the world and lives around the rich part of/outside Nanako. Same area as Ace.
Despite having a very good and disciplined family, she developed rebellious behavior and got interested in prank videos/stunt videos and pornography.

She was expelled from the school due to how she was acting and now gets home schooled by a private tutor. If she doesn't return home to attend lessons, her family will hire agents or private security to find her and take her home. They will also lower the amount of money they give her weekly, so she shows up to her classes most of the time.
She likes to prank people but will likely leave them be if they get too upset. At times she'll try to seduce males she likes but she is very picky, focusing on looks, personality and performance.

If one of those things isn't good enough, she won't be interested. Most people avoid her due to her attitude, reckless and selfish actions and how dangerous she can be as a rival.
She will often reward people who help her and who she likes and she'll try to punish people who upset her. She uses her personal finances for both of these things.

 

Dialogue:

Chenny and Greel.
Chenny: If you don't like me then just tell me instead of dodging me all the time.
Greel: I'm not. I just get busy, you know with music and other people...
Chenny: But it's annoying when I'm alone and you're fucking around with groupies.
Greel: I'm sorry you feel that way, babe. Would you like to head to the cafe and discuss this over some food?
Chenny: No way. I got my own chefs at home. I don't want that plebeian crap.
Greel: Ple...be... What?
Chenny: It means common. Anyone who ain't me, basically.

Chenny and Tsugo.
Tsu: Oh hello, Chenermal.
Chenny: Hey.
Tsu: How are things? Are your private tutor sessions going exceptionally well?
Chenny: Yeah... I got to show up or mom will lower my allowance.
Tsu: Well I am pleased to hear you're obeying your parents' authority. At your time in school, you were a complete barbarian.
Chenny: Shut up. Before I suck your dick and tell your bitch you cheated.
Tsu: You wouldn't do that. Would you?
Chenny: Nope. I'm kidding. I'd never suck you.

Chenny and Jay.
Chenny: Are you taking photos of me?
Jay: Yes I am. Smile!
Chenny: So I assume you know who I am?
Jay: No, you're just hot!
Chenny: Oh right. Thank you.
Jay: How about a breasts flash?
Chenny: Ehh... You're not worth my time.

Chenny and Tom.
Chenny: Hey, Tom. I got something for you.
Tom: Oh my... I'm not sure if this is the best time or place.
Chenny: Not that, fool. Here, some money.
Tom: Some money?! That's a lot of money. Are you trying to pay me for something?
Chenny: It's a thank you gift. You were the only teacher who respected me and I wanted to show my appreciation.
Tom: Well, you know...
Chenny: You helped me out of some bullshit situations. All I had to do was...
Tom: Yeah I know. Not too loud.

 

Facts:
She is in contact with either members of Gemco or a group of PMC's/Mercenaries. So at times she'll use hired muscle to power flex, intimidate and in some cases, teach someone a lesson.

She has a serious fear of being submerged in water.

To most people's surprise, she has a decent amount of skill in both English and Economics and will often read instructive books when bored. 

She takes her health very seriously and avoids eating certain types of foods. She is never seen eating ice cream for example.

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Wilsonthegreen said
@oecus 

 

Took a look at the description. Looks good so far, only thing Id suggest editing is the part about Jeni incentivizing training with sex. That sounds a bit ooc since she doesn’t like perves that only do stuff for sex. Its Vortex’s call but I Think she’d be more interested in a guy that wouldnt need that kind of incentive to train to fight.   

I get what you mean.

Jeni is one of the few characters I can't understand sex wise. It's seems like she is indifferent to it and does it as a mean to accomplish something; subduing her brother, being friendly, getting paid, helping the cafe, etc.

She always doesn't look interested in sex as the scenes in the cafe have her on phone, but it seems like she enjoyed group sex from what she told Maiko.

So, I was saying she uses it as a way to motivate him, a reward. I.e. Get 5 hits on me and we'll have sex, ehich may cause him to push himself more. Not in the sense that he doesn't want to train and she says if your train today we can have sex.

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This is awesome that Wilsonthegreen made this forum, get to see a-lot of created characters that vortex[others?] can use.

One reason I made a character was because Silver inspired Me, with the details he put on August, so thanks, wish I can hi-five all of youSmile [not in public though, because I'm shy]

So I'll show My character

Name; Code"Solar"Natan, Jr Gender; Male Current job; development/experiment to Executive  Preferred Khalei; Yellow 

Special skills; problem-solving, accurate memory, quick learner, excellent hand-eye coordination, expert in-a-lot of trades.

Flaws; focuses on important things that often leaves him staring blankly [3-7 seconds], can be to much with the info he gives, feels sad when he can't give info he knows nothing about.

Backstory; on his first day of school he ask to do all the marked test and finished with half a day to spare. mostly trying to improve/alter the bots to be more versatile, and on his of-time he reads instructive books, manuals and cook books. Also vary good at massages.

Character affiliations; no one at first because he got through school fast, but wishes to help find a cure for Khalei degeneration when he meet Dizzy

can't wait to see everyone's awesome character[s].

The following users say thank you to Isaiah for this useful post:

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@unticop

I think there were talks about a drama club but I don't think it ever existed. at most Roise was trying to get members maybe to resurrect it, he could haven been one of them.
would have had to have been a few years back making him a bit older than roise.

i don't mind the roise love interest.

bisexual male is getting into territory I don't want really want to get into. I don't plan on doing any guy x guy. i don't think ttrop likes drawing that either iirc.

keep in mind phia is best agent in terms of shooting accuracy.
I do like the dialogue in general though.
phia might a have a "psssh!" after he claims to be the best.

need physical description or example of the character.

@oecus

looks good for the most part.

if Paul's father was unemployed, and the GemCo exec knew about his debt already, it's doubtful that the gemco exec would make that kind of offer since he has nothing for the exec to own. "everything you own is mine"
also no reason to beat up the father either since the exec knew about the debt and even cheated to win.

For this to work I think Paul's father perhaps would have needed to initiate the bet himself by lying about what he has to offer to the exec.
and the exec somehow believed him. maybe a poker face idk. this can also be a reason he go beaten up after.

an interesting plot twist you might consider is that the exec actually didn't beat him up, but he got beaten up by someone else he thought were the exec's goons.
or could have even been david and crew. would could be interesting considering his relationship with jeni.

stacy doesn't do treadmill. it's safe to assume no giant boob character does treadmill.
it is a minor issues and tread mill can replaced with exercise ball or exercise bike.

for the braid ttrop has that. it's just really hard to see and probably too spaced out.

you are correct to assume jeni doesn't have sex unless necessary. she has sex with david because holly insists it will be the best thing to calm him down.

@litlikecandle

Chenny at first read sounds like a disruptive lynn
it seems like the could be made to be Ace's daughter. or maybe niece.
if she is expelled and home schooled, where do the conversations with greel, tom, Tsugo and Jay occur?

it is not clear what guy she likes? Greel?

would help to have dialogue with her and Maiko. esp if she likes Greel. keep in mind Peach likes Greel also and is one of his groupies.
and also dialogue with Lynn. possibly with cain present and one with lynn with Luma present.

need to describe physical appearance. if aces daughter I can assume grey/white hair for starters.

@izik0c4

keep in mind that when natan leaves he will assume some special agents under natan including tiffany.
that should be interesting to say the least.

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@Vortex00

 

Being related to Ace could work. I had a dialogue idea where Ace is harassing Leyah about what happened in CH then Chenny tells him to leave so he does. 

The scene suggests that her and Ace aren't on best terms but he also listens to her, which could mean he is trying to keep on her family's good side or just sees her as more trouble than she is worth. 

I can think about this relationship. But I'm cool with her being related if you like that idea.

 

The conversations can be anywhere around Nanako. Likely areas where she can buy things and do pranks. Mall, beach, theme park, etc.

 

She liked Greel but starts to dislike him. Greel is an example of how she'll drift apart from someone if they don't deliver enough in friendship. So it's more like Greel trying to remain humble while she shows disapproval. 

 

I can post some new dialogue in future. Edit* I wrote a scene with Lynn and Cain. And a scene with Greel and Maiko.

 

And yeah. I actually did a design for Chenny and she had a white, grayish hair. What are the odds. XD

I was thinking of this style. Tied and to the side. ch-hair.jpgImage Enlarger

I was also thinking of her having no make-up. Maybe painted nails, colors might depend on her outfit. 

I can design an outfit whenever you want.

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Chenny and Leyah. Arcade
Chenny: I prefer real life.
Leyah: Nyaa! You don't play all the time.
Ace enters
Ace: Hello, girls.
Leyah: Go away! You're a bad person!
Ace: Don't be like that. You know you liked it.
Chenny: I'm trying to have a conversation here. Fuck off.
Ace: Ugh. Ok, fine.
Ace leaves
Leyah: He's gone?
Chenny: You're welcome.

Chenny, Lynn and Cain.
Chenny: Haha. These guys must be so jealous that I can hang around with you.
Cain: You say that everytime, miss Trucarpa.
Lynn: Yes... It's... kind of embarrassing. I don't see my limitations as a good thing.
Chenny: Look at it this way, if I wanted my own Cain, he'll come out of my own personal money. You get this guy for free.

Chenny and Greel, interacting with Maiko.
Chenny: Who is this? Another fangirl?
Greel: This is Maiko. And she's much more than a fan.
Maiko: Hi.
Chenny: Are you two fucking?
Maiko: Well...
Greel: Where did that come from?
Chenny: I want a little live show. What do you say? I'll pay well.
(Possible Greel x Maiko scene with Chenny masturbating in the background?)

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I attempted to fix what you told me and tried to implement the twist, but it ended up making his background longer, if that’s okay.

 

Paul’s mother died giving birth to him, leaving his father to raise him. Due to depression, Paul’s father turned to gambling. His father had a knack for gambling and was able to make enough money to take care of his son, even teaching him the ropes on the side. On one of Paul’s father’s trips to the Casino, he wore his best suit and told Paul he would be playing against a Gemco Executive and he was about to strike big. At the Casino he approached a man with white hair holding a cigar and challenged him. He pretended to own a big company and said that they would be betting high. Due to the money at large, the executive decided to accept his offer. As the game went on Paul’s father was about to win, until the agent cheated to turn the cards around. Having lost, and lying about the money, his father ended up in debt to the man having to pay him monthly.

One evening Paul’s father went to pay off the final installment of the debt. After his meeting he decided to stop at a new cafe that opened up, as he heard about their “services.” Once he got there he saw a brown haired woman standing outside and decided to ask to students who looked like they were about to enter if she was one of those special waitresses. One of the students told the other that he had seen him talking to some gemco agents and that he might be one so they confronted the man. The brown haired student started punching Paul’s father which caused Paul’s father to fight back, but he was struck hard again knocking him out.

Once Paul found out that his father was in the hospital, he assumed that it was because of the gemco executive and decided to get revenge.

Some things to note with this rewrite:

  • I fixed the problem with Ace knowing he was in debt and still facing him, by saying that he challenged him whilst pretending to be rich. This also still gives a reason for him to still have association with the Ace, since he is now in debt to him.
  • I attempted to add the twist you said, but I needed a reason for two things to happen.
    • 1. That David would want to fight/hit him.
    • 2. That he didn’t tell Paul that he just got into an unrelated brawl.
  • So, the reasoning for David to hit him would be:
    • 1. He thinks he is a gemco agent.
    • 2. He is asking for his sister/entering the cafe.
    • 3. He was hit back after.
  • The reasoning why he doesn’t tell Paul that he was hit by a student is because:
    • The punch knocked him out causing him to forget the incident or the punch sent him into a coma. If not for one of these two there would be no reason for Paul to think it was Ace as his father could’ve just told him. This also goes inline with the fact that Sentoryu try to hide what their son does so it could be possible that they just took him to the hospital?
  • Now this corrects the problem I had that no one could link the events together.
    • Now Jeni or Holly could realize that Paul is the son of the man from before.
    • David could also say that Paul reminds him of another Gemco agent that tried to get at his sister. (Since Paul’s father isn’t an agent, Paul won't recognize that he is talking about his father.)
  • They key points are still retained:
    • Reason why he knows how to play card games and likes gambling.
    • Reason why he doesn’t like owing people.
    • Reason for wanting to go after Ace and enroll in Gemco.
    • Reason for wanting to get stronger.

David and Paul’s relationship:

With that being said, I think this now better paints a meeting between David and Paul. In UMCH I think you had a seen where Maiko enters right after Kyle finished paying and still have an interaction. I think there was also one where David was requesting for his sister, so something similar could have happened here.

David could walk into the cafe asking for his sister, when Holly states that she already has a customer who paid. David asking who, sees Paul wearing a gemco suit? and proceeds to accost him. Fight ensues, Jeni breaks it up. Maybe David says he reminds him of another agent?

You said maybe Maiko introduces him to Jeni so this goes in line with the fact why their family would be okay with a gemco agent being at the cafe and why he would be in the suit when david sees him.

 

Fixing Problems with Stacy and Max:

In the previous thread post you said that she would usually be on the ball or treadmill which I why I went with treadmill, but exercise bike works.

As for Max, the new backstory would mean that he spoke to max after Holly left, not before meaning he couldn’t have waited for Max to go to one of his “lessons.” Originally I was going to say that Paul challenged him to weight lift and as Paul approached the bar Max said never mind. I see max as a bark no bite character based on his interactions with Carl. Not sure if this would work instead of Paul waiting for Max to go to a lesson to workout next to Stacy.

 

Also, I forgot to ask this before but was the character design planned to be used for something else. I would feel bad if I completely erased what you had in mind for him, and was thinking maybe I could try to incorporate some of the things you had planned.

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So I kinda like the idea of Ace being the father of Chenny.

Not sure if this is out of character for him but here is dialogue explaining their relationship.

Chenny and Ace.
Ace: Do you have to be so bitchy to me all the time? I'm tired of your attitude.
Chenny: Yes! Because your rules are annoying and you probably care about your money more than me.
Ace: My rules are there to keep you safe and help you succeed in life. And I love you. I care about you more than anything or anyone else.
Chenny: Good point... and I'm happy to hear that... But you're still a dick.
Ace: How so? I'm trying my best to be a good father and role model.
Chenny: What about that time you had a girl held captive in your room? That's fucked up. I came home to find you arrested. Seriously, what the fuck?
Ace: I guess I did go too far. I can admit that. I'm willing to learn from my mistakes but you must be willing to give me a chance. Sound fair?
Chenny: Yeah ok. Thanks for... caring about me. 

 

(This may contradict the arcade scene with Leyah but that scene can be scrapped if so. I wrote that before I thought of this one.)

 

Also, Paul, Oecus' character could use Chenny to get close to Ace, so I could do discussions with him if this idea works.

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The characters so for sound awesome, also Spiral I would like to know some lore on Natan, if you would be so kind.

If I remember curretly, Natan is an exec, works at the school [Math teacher] and is trying to work on a cure for Khalei degeneration?

Just wanted to know some lore and who Solar can interact with, if you don't mind I'll think of some dialogue with Rogna, Alma or T.T?

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@Vortex00 

 

Yeah I think drama club was only referenced in umcc a couple of times but I recall that it was shut down before umcc/umch started. Which would make Percival a little older than the characters at nanako.

I didn’t think the bi-male thing would go anywhere outside of occasionally in dialogue tbh but I can change him to be straight if you’d prefer. Just figured since he’d be a pseudo mentor/love interest to Roise, it’d make sense for him to be bi like she is.

Dialogue change:
Percival: Pretty good? I’d hazard that I’m the best shot in the academy. Well, aside from you of course, ms. Sharpshooter.
Ari: Psssssh! Really? Is that why Jeo’s the second highest ranked?
Percival: Well that’s not a fair comparison. He’s like a robot with how calculating he is. A passionate soul like me couldn’t hope to compete.
Percival: If it weren’t for what the girls here say about him, I wouldn’t think he was a man at all.
Phia: Oh he’s a man all right and he knows just what a woman wants in one. Don’t you think so Ari?
Ari: W-what would I know about that?!

 

Physical description: 

Slim build, just started physical training, so he wouldn’t have much muscle yet. Looks androgynous enough to allow him to disguise as some female body types.

Hair is red, longer than average for a guy, tied into a ponytail (got refs for that attached to this message) ponytail-ref.pngImage Enlargerponytail-ref2.pngImage Enlarger

Don't know if you want any details on dick stuff since you don't really make any standing sprites w/ dicks any more. 

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Ha! i would love to make a character like this but it would probably be a die hard punk rocker lesbian who just straight up ignors male characters, not sure if it would fit the universe or whether the artist or writer would be comfortable with such a character 😀 love the other characters suggested here, percival sounds interesting 🙂

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Taking a little break from character creation right now to catch up on animations and stuff I have presently ready for use, but I can ping you when I get back to character stuff if you want.

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Sure, i was just thinking of it casually for fun, but it would be fun 🙂

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