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this is for Rhythmic Gymnastics club dialogue ideas.
previews examples:
http://spiralvortexplay.com/svp/category/text/script/
For those with ideas these are some things to note:
Members include, Maiko(player), Alma (club supervisor), Pattie, Stacy (Luma sister), Joey, and Lynn
Stacy is club leader.
Stacy call Maiko’s “Missy” and is competitive and cocky/confident
Joey and Stacy clash a bit personality since joey conservative and stacy is a sex freak.
Stacy has a alternate pic with her nipples exposed.
Lynn always gets her routine perfect
Boys pass the gym on the way to boxing, lockers, etc. Same as how the can visit the pool.
Boys are in boxing of school attire
Maiko and Stacy leotard barely cover their nipples from stretching over their boobs.
in the win poses for the minigame maikos nipples can pop out so characters can talk about it happening.
Sometimes Yui or Luma is there instead of Cain.
when Luma is there or stops by she is in boxing or school attire.
Gym is on the way to sentinel battle area so characters like Chris and Chest pass through there also.
Stacy, Maiko and Pattie can reference stuff from the cafe. Joey also as a person who visited there for her news articles.
Stacy tries to seduce Cain but Cain never falls for it.
Kyle shows up several times since two other members of publishing club are here. Pattie and Joey. and technically Maiko.
minigame is mouse avoider game
About Author
Alma: Stacy! fix your attire or you will be suspended from the club.
Stacy: Whaaat? Missy tits always pop out and you say that to her!
Maiko: Because mines fall out on accident…
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Luma: Don’t let these nerds beat you sis! Lynn doesn’t count though.
Lynn: Huh? why don’t I count?
Luma: Because stuff like this is easy for us special Agents!
Stacy: Yeah she is always perfect every time somehow.
Lynn: Hehe.
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Luma: Sup my lovely bitches!
Lynn: Hello Luma-san.
Luma: what’s up nerdlet?
Maiko: Hi…
Cain: Luma! make sure you report to swimming today to continue building your stamina.
Cain: You were a little winded after yesterdays training.
Luma: Yeah well you trying carrying these tits around man!
Cain: I could easily clear the training course in half the time while carrying you, tits and all.
Luma: Okay okay I’ll swim more damn.
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Kyle: Oooh there!
Jay: Got it! Barely. It’s a good one.
Kyle: Oh let me see!
Joey: Um…What are you two doing? And why are you here?
Kyle: uh…Just making sure my photographers are getting the proper exercise?
Joey: Why do you and Jay have cameras then?
Pattie: because they are just taking pervy photos chu.
Alma: Ok boys, time to leave before you get detention.
Will there be new scenes for this too?
yes, maybe more on the ecchi/yuri side thoguh. beach area coming later will have more hardcore stuff.
I love these kind of mini games man! And to have Alma as supervisor… awesome!
glad you like it~
I’d love to something with Alma
kind of tricky with Alma I have her in the same category as Lynn. She not really a character that wants to have sex.
Kyle: Come on man, gotta go fast if you wanna catch some pictures of Lynn without Cain noticing!
Jay: Lynn-chan pics are so hard to get, but I like the challenge, heh
Kyle: Got to be silent, otherwise we are screwed…
Chester: You know, I have a bunch of Lynn pictures if you guys wanna see. I get past her body guard daily! Its so easy man… You guys are just newbies…
Jay: shh man, don´t compromise us
Cain: What about having pics of Lynn and getting through me? Give me those cameras and come with me.
Kyle: SHIT! RUN!
Jay: CHESTER DISAPPEARED! WTF MAN!
Cain: I WONT REPEAT AGAIN! CAMERAS!
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Chris: What did you want to tell me about that sentinel modification you made?
Jay: I was messing with it a red khalei one and got a hold to how it worked a bit.
Chris: I see, what did you find out?
Jay: Not much, but holding the red capacitor made me slightly faster, but as a side effect… it…
Chris:It did what?
Jay: Unbuttoned my shirt man! I got topless all of sudden everytime I hold it!
Chris: *chuckles*
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David: Where´s the little fucker?
Pattie: Just girls here chu!
Alma: What happened?
David: That glasses dork snuck glue on my boxing gloves and now i can´t untie my shorts to pee!
Girls: *giggling*
Alma: He is not here, only the girls are practicing on the gym!
David: Cmon guys, lets check next to the sentinel dorks! I gonna kill him when find him!
Pattie: Jay chu, you can get out now!
Jay: Thanks Pattie! Gotta go before Alma notices me! I own you one.
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Jay: Hey Kyle, what can you tell me about Yui? She is pretty sexy…
Kyle: Slow down man, you got too many girls on your list! Don´t you like Lynn? And aren´t you way too friendly with Leyah?
Jay: I know man, but I just can´t decide myself yet, haha
Yui: Ohh, talking about me?
Kyle: Hey there cute nips!
Jay: You got to see her nipples? Damn man…
Yui: Cut it out Kyle, what are you and your friend doing here? Looking for more pics for me to delete?
Kyle: My friend wanted to look at you, that’s all.
Jay: Oh… Hi! So… agent, huh?
Yui: That’s cute and all, but I don’t have time to lose with you right now, I am guarding Lynn and you are way too young for me.
Kyle: Told ya…
Jay: *whispers* challenge accepted…
Kyle: Lets just go man…
thanks looks good, a bit of editing needed but works overall. some might be better in other places also.
Nice! I am glad you like it 🙂
I Love it
glad you like it
Did I hear hentai with Alma?
it is not something I have scheduled to do heh.
I will say as a laptop user that mouse games are frustrating XD wasd or arrow key controls would be appreciated, although probably not plausible for most of the mini games. Keep up the great work! Also as the name implies, more Luma MMD!
Thanks, I use a laptop also on the road but I still have a mouse in case I need one. it is really easy and inexpensive to get a mouse these days, you might even know someone who has a old mouse you can have. it really limits what I can make when I work around not having a mouse. Haven’t touched MMD in a while I’ll get back to it later, hopefully soon but not sure.
Made a few myself, didn’t feel great when I made them. So you might want to look them over extra to
make sure they’re alright.
Joey: You know you guys aren’t supposed to be lurking around here right?
Joiry: Whoa, whoa, whoa, there’s no lurking going on here. We’re just walking to the boxing ring.
David: Yeah, we’re just walking reaaaaal slow is all.
Joiry: It’s part of a new mumbo jumbo exercise technique. You take it easy first so you have more energy in the ring.
Jeni: If you’re so worried about energy I can drag you two in just fine…
David: Yo bro we should speed up, she sounds serious.
Joiry: I can’t argue with that bro, lets get running!
Joey: Thanks Jeni.
Jeni: No problem, someone has to herd these idiots.
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Alma: Good to see you here Maiko, is everything going all right?
Maiko: Um, yeah I think so.
Alma: Classes going all right?
Maiko: Yeah.
Alma: Getting enough sleep?
Maiko: Um… sure?
Alma: Eating enough vegetables?
Maiko: These are getting weirdly personal Alma.
Alma: A-are they? I just wanted to make sure all my students are feeling alright.
Maiko: Well don’t worry so much, I’m doing just fine.
Alma: Ah that’s good to hear Maiko.
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Stacy: Hey Cain~ Nice to see you starring at me today.
Cain: ……………………..
Stacy: No need to play the silent game. I saw you looking and I don’t have a problem with a little more~
Lynn: I don’t think he’s interested Stacy.
Stacy: Nonsense! He’s just a little shy is-
Cain: Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
Stacy: Wait he’s sleeping?! Ugh! I can’t believe it! I’m out of here!
Lynn: Cain fell asleep here?
Cain: Of course not Lynn.
Lynn: Ah! Why were you snoring just now?
Cain: Just playing pretend to keep Stacy from distracting me from the task at hand. Can’t let anything get in the way of keeping you safe.
Lynn: Oh… right.
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Alma: Kyle, do I need to send you to detention?
Kyle: Wait don’t do that! I’m on… official club business! Yeah that’s it!
Alma: Official how?
Kyle: I-I need to deliver a message to the other members of course!
Alma: Alright, well Pattie and Joey are here. So you can deliver it.
Kyle: Ah… they are, well club members. I just wanted to tell you all to… be ready to take lots of pictures next meeting!
Alma: …Was that it?
Kyle: Yes, so I’ll just be going now and you won’t throw me in detention. Right?
Alma: Sure, just get out of here.
Kyle: Thank you!
Joey: I’m so embarrassed…
Pattie: It’s alright, he’s always like this so you’ll eventually get used to it.
Cain pretending to sleep seemed a bit odd, and Stacy can’t leave mid conversation in the socialize/random talk scenes. The rest seem pretty good thanks
Now that you think about it, Cain would be too stoic for something like that. Do you think Yui or someone else may do something like that instead?
Also have a few more.
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Stacy: Boo, boo. Isn’t it a shame we can’t be at the cafe today missy?
Maiko: Well, it’s fine with me. It’s nice to have a break from work every now and then.
Stacy: Yeah but stretching and stuff only loosens you up so much. It takes a good dick to get really relaxed.
Maiko: If you say so Stacy…
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Stacy: Missy, could you tell granny over here to take the stick out of her ass and put it somewhere more pleasant?
Joey: What’s that supposed to mean?!
Stacy: It means you’re a buzzkill that’ll never get laid with that stiff attitude you got going.
Joey: There are guys interested in me! Just because I don’t put out to every loser in school doesn’t mean I can’t get a guy.
Stacy: Don’t you call me that granny!
Joey: I wouldn’t say it if it weren’t true.
Player interupt
Maiko: Hey girls, let’s just calm down alright?!
Joey: ……………………………………….
Stacy: ……………………………………………..
Maiko: (How am I supposed to deal with this?!)
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Stacy: Miss Alma! Chris is sneaking recording equipment to spy on our routine!
Chris: W-what?! No it’s just my sentinel. There’s no camera on it, for real!
Alma: If it were Kyle, you may be onto something but Chris wouldn’t sneak anything like that in here.
Chris: Thanks miss Alma.
Stacy: If you say so but it really looks like a camera to me though…
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Joey: Could you at least try to keep your top on?
Stacy: Well it’s tricky since I actually have something to cover up granny.
Joey: What did you call me?!
Stacy: Granny, it’s your new nickname. On account of your fashion sense and nagging personality.
Joey: It’s not nagging to tell someone to actually wear clothes!
Stacy: Whatever you say, granny.
Player interrupt
Maiko: Whoa, no insults here alright? Let’s all just get along.
Joey: She started it!
Stacy: She started it!
Maiko: (Yikes, these two can get loud!)
These are good thanks~
for the Cain I just changed to this:
Stacy: Hey there~ Nice to see you starring at me today.
Cain: ………huh?
Stacy: No need to play dumb. I saw you looking and I don’t have a problem with a little more~
Lynn: I don’t think he’s interested Saiyumi-san.
Stacy: Nonsense! He’s just a little shy!
Cain: ……Riiiiiight.
I think it would be better to have more skimpy costumes, ARIA style.
Remember that it would be better that the games can be efficiently completed with only one hand, preferably the mouse one.
The Boxing end pool ones are not.
I know these aren’t dialogues suggestions but I hope you can take them into account.
sorry but if you expecting to play every part of the game with one hand you are simply in the wrong place.
in ARIA the outfits are skimpy for reasons based on the lore. UMCH the setting is different and skimpy school outfits would be a unpalatable contrast to my goals for this game.
Get a Razer Naga and map your z,x,s, and q buttons onto the thumbpad. You can create multiple profiles for the mouse, so it’s easy to switch between profiles for different games…hentai and otherwise. I got the mouse for Guild Wars 2, and it makes that game so much more playable….but it works for this too. Thank me later. 😀
I’m so jelly and sad I can’t play the demos you release vortex sama. I really got to get a computer so I can play your epic games coz I am missing out. I haven’t even been able to draw since my pc hard drive died so as u can tell my life is pretty miserable with out a pc :'(
Any way I am so happy to see you progressing through your projects sensei and I can’t wait for the day when u can teach n help me out with mine in the future. I had 2 ideas for my 1st games 1 being a triple triad hentai card game and the other is a visual novel. I hope eventually as I gain more exp in my art and animation I’ll be able to create some hot stuff like your games with awesome sex animations. 🙂
Yeah I can’t imagine too long without a PC. but that depends on where I’m at I guess. best to begin with the VN first imo.
And I thought I was suffering when my power supply failed and the only working computer I had was an old netbook running windows xp for three months….fortunately this was before windows ended support for it, but still…my heart goes out to you. :C